如何写出英语作文得分的“亮点”1 600字高中英语作文

　　1。 改变句子的开头方式，不是一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首，或用分词作状语等。试比较:

　　(原文) My brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle the other day。

　　(修正) The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle。

　　(原文) The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news。

　　(修正) Hearing the bad news， the young man couldn’t help crying。

　　2。 在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用诸如强调句、主从复合句、分词短语、倒装句、省略句等。例如:

　　(1)强调句

　　(原文) The dog has saved my little sister bravely。

　　(修正) It is the dog that has saved my little sister bravely。

　　(2)主从复合句

　　(原文) We had to stand there to catch the offender。

　　(修正) What we had to do was to stand there， trying to catch the offender。

　　(3)分词短语、由with或without引导的短语

　　(原文) The driver escaped and didn’t stop， he left the old man lying on the road。

　　(修正) The driver escaped without stopping， leaving the old man lying on the road。

　　(4)倒装句

　　(原文) I went to bed at 11:30。

　　(修正) Not until 11:30 did I go to bed。

　　(5)省略句

　　(原文) While you are crossing the street， you should be careful。

　　(修正) While crossing the street， you should be careful。

中英语作文--My dream job

　　My dream jobEverybody has his dream job。 I also have my dream job。 My dream is to work for foreign tourists as a tour guide。

　　Why do I want to be a tour guide? First of all， I"m an outgoing girl， and I like doing some exciting things。 Maybe being a tour guide is the best choice。 If I become a tour guide， I can travel all around China， and know more about our country。

　　Then I will tell the foreign tourists about our colorful history。 Second， I like making friends。 If I work as a tour guide， I can make a lot of friends all over the world。

　　This may be great。 Perhaps someday my foreign friends will ask me to visit their countries。 I really like to go to their countries to know something about their culture。

　　What’s more， I like singing。 Singing English songs is my favorite。 I believe I will be popular with foreign tourists。

　　Their trip will be excellent。Now， I am still a middle school student。 My job now is to work hard in school。

　　Then I’ll go to university to learn something about being a tour guide。 I’m sure I can be a qualified tour guide in the future